Hi Bloggers Today I´m going to write about the best holidays I´ve ever
had
In the summer of 2015 I traveled with many friends in
the island of Chiloé, visited different places and cities, where we dedicate
eat all traditional foods.
(I returned
home with 5 kg more).
We visited Castro, Chonchi, Dalcahue, Cucao and one
day some people in Dalcahue spoke about a legend of witches and how the people
became witches. So we decide visit the waterfall where witches prepare and
purify for the catholic baptism. They bathed about 12 hours in waterfall. The
place is amazing, surrounded of native forest, with biggest trees and the water
is very cold. And we try to made purify but we can stay under the waterfall
only 15 minutes and we froze.
Other thing I really loved for the Island was the
wheater, the day can be sunny but in 30 minutes can rain very strong but the
people didn´t care they made all regardlles rain
Really we had a great time in Chiloé and met new
places (natural places and cities) and people are to friendly.
In the sentence, “ with many Friends in the island of Chiloé”, “in” replace for “to”. When you say “ where we DEDICATE” It’s wrong because is DEDICATED, past time. Same error in the next sentence “ So, we decide”, It´s DECIDED. Other error is when you say “wheater”, because wheater not exist, is WEATHER.
ResponderEliminarSee you next class rafa!
Hi rafa! great post!
ResponderEliminarbut I have to say that in the same sentence "in the island of Chiloé" you could change to " to the Chiloé Island"
regards
In the summer of 2015 I traveled with many friends (in) TO the island of Chiloé, (TS)
ResponderEliminarWE visited different places and cities, where we dedicateD OURSELVES TO eat all traditional foods.(SS1)
(I returned home with 5 kg more). (COMMENT)
We visited Castro, Chonchi, Dalcahue, Cucao and one day some people in Dalcahue spoke about a legend of witches and how the people became witches. (SS2)
So we decideD TO visit the waterfall where witches prepareD and purify WHAT? for the Catholic baptism. (EXPLANATION)
They bathed about 12 hours in waterfall. (SS3)
The place is amazing, surrounded BY (of) native forest, with biggest trees and the water is very cold. (EXPLANATION)
And we trIED(y) to (made purify) (CONFUSING) but we [can] COULD stay under the waterfall only 15 minutes and we froze. (EXAMPLE)
ANother thing I really loved for the Island was the (wheater) WEATHER,(SS4)
the day can be sunny but in 30 minutes IT can rain very strongLY but the people didn´t care they made (all?) regardlles THE rain EXPLANATION
Really we had a great time in Chiloé and (met) KNEW new places (natural places and cities) and people are (to???) VERY friendly.
Rafael,
The structure of your text is fine, but it is not easy to read due to the TOO MANY mistakes you have. You are supposed to edit your text before you post it. A text with so many spelling-grammar-vocabulary mistakes in not acceptable. Please, consider that next time.